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NaNo Prep: Writing Rules III – Return of WriMo

Monday October 29, 2012 | By Hieronymus Hawkes | Uncategorized | Leave Comments

NaNoWriMo is merely three days away, and in the spirit of preparation I revamped my Writing Rules again.  This time when I went back to review them I realized that they were a hodgepodge of thoughts with no form.  So I organized them and revamped them and added some new content.  As always I am open to suggestion if you see something wrong or something that needs clarified or plain just doesn't make sense.

This is kind of long and I have it posted as it's own page here.

A few years back a friend of mine asked if I could pass along some of what I’ve learned over the past couple of years about trying to write a book.  I’ve tried to distill that info here.

I am focused on novel writing, so all of these ideas may not apply to poetry writing or something other than Novels or Novellas.  Please feel free to add in some comments that will help refine this.  This is all from the perspective of a novice unpublished writer, but I have done my homework, and learned a few things along the way.  These so called “rules” are merely guidelines.  There are no hard and fast rules.

Getting Started: Setting and Characters

There are a couple of ways to do this, and a couple of key ingredients that you need to start.  You are going to need to know the setting…intimately, at least for the actual places your characters will be.  This doesn’t mean you need to include every detail in the narrative, but you, as author, need to know how things work. 

The other key ingredient is the characters.   A strong protagonist and a strong antagonist are absolutely essential.  Other types of characters you might include are companion, or foil, for your main characters that will allow you to showcase certain aspects of your main characters, to bring out viewpoints or details about the background that might be needed to flesh out the world.  Another key character type is the relationship character, which will usually be at odds with the protagonist early and will mend the relationship by the end.

I recommend writing down everything you know about the character.  You don’t want to make them perfect people, interesting characters have flaws.  They need to be balanced.  Try writing a little bit in their POV to get to know them if you are stuck.  You don’t have to use any of this but it may help you understand the pathos of your character better, and they should all be suffering to one extent or another, otherwise, why are we writing about them.
A lot of people get hung up on world building.  They really like this part, and I can see the fun and the draw of that, but at some point you need stop world building, develop a plot idea, some characters and start writing an actual story.

Okay, so now you have some characters and a setting what do you do next?
Plots and Character Arcs

There are basically two types of arcs, an internal and an external.  The external is pretty straight forward, things happen in the world.  Usually your characters will react to these things and respond, making a new thing happen.  The external character arc is usually what people will refer to as the plot of the book.  A happens then B happens then C happens. 

The internal arc is about how your protagonist deals with things in their head.  The internal character arc is what the book is about.  The internal arc is more about how your character changes through the book, not how things in the external world change.

An Arc is exactly what it sounds like, rising action to the climax then falling action to the dénouement.   You can have multiple arcs and for novels you will have several hopefully.  A short story usually has one. For the longer piece you will have an overarching character Arc.  The big problem that needs to solved.  Inside of that you will have mini-arcs that tell a smaller story within the story, and different characters may be involved with each one.  You need to close each of these off before you end the story, unless perhaps it is part of a larger story arc involving multiple books.  

Each of these little arcs are like promises to the reader, and you need to keep your promises and solve the arcs or the reader will feel cheated.

The axiom is that the closer together you can resolve the external and internal arc and reconcile with the relationship character the more powerful the ending will be, ideally in the same chapter if that is possible.  A really great book for this concept is Wired for Story by Lisa Cron.

There are a couple of well-known formulas for setting up your story arc, for example: The Three Act Play, or the Hollywood Formula or 7 Part Story Structure.  There are lots of ways to skin the cat.

Point of View and Voice

Choose your voice for the story and be consistent. The POV is really going to set the tone for your narrative, so you need to think this through to see who will tell the most interesting story.

You have two tenses and three basic points of view to choose from and you can mix and match these giving you a wide variety of ways to tell your story.  Most established authors that I’ve spoken to or read about tell you to avoid present tense, leaving past tense as the most commonly used method.   Third person narrative is the prevailing approach, but books are also written in first person, Twilight by Stephanie Meyers is a good example, and second person, Halting State by Charles Stross is a good example of this form, but it’s fairly rare. 

There are also variations on how to use the third person in the form of omniscient, objective (primarily used for news reporting) and limited, which can lend itself to a narrator that is unreliable.  Unreliable just means you only see what the character sees and feel what the character feels, whether it’s a true representation of reality or not.  Third person works very well if you are changing the narrator. 

Each character will allow you to tell a different aspect of a story, but you will need to pick the one that tells the story you want or at least has access to all the important stuff.  You can use more than one Point of View character.  But please don’t jump heads in the middle of a paragraph, have the decency to have a definite break before you switch POVs. 

For each scene the POV character should have something at stake.  If they don’t have anything at stake for that scene then someone else should be the POV.  If nobody has anything at stake you might want to rethink keeping that scene.  As a general rule of thumb if you start a scene with one POV and switch, you should try to end the scene in the POV of the one you started with.

Pantsing or Outlining?

There is no right or wrong way to write a book.  The end goal is to have a finished story that makes sense and the reader is able to follow and enjoy.  The two most prominent that I am aware of are outlining and discovery.

Outlining is just what it implies; you make an outline then flesh it in and keep adding layers and detail to your outline in the form of story.

Pantsing, or maybe better known as Discovery Writing, is where you have a kernel of an idea and just start and let the story go where it wants.  I prefer a combination of the two, with a basic outline then start writing and adjust my outline as the story progresses.  Another common way for discovery writing is to get to where you are about what you think is 2/3 done then outline the ending to help you close the loop on your story.

Where do you start the story?

There is an oft quoted idea that says, “Get in as late as you can and out as early as you can.”  But this doesn’t necessarily mean you start like a James Bond Movie.  There is a lot of advice out there that says “start in the middle of the action,” but I’m not convinced that’s the best way to do it.

We need to have enough of a feel for the normal life and even a little empathy for the protagonist before we start blowing up his or her world.
The beginning of the book should grab the reader.   But what it really means is showing us why we should be interested in this particular protagonist.  What is different or interesting about him or her? This is not universal, I know a lot of established authors don't really follow this advice, but they already have a following.  To hook new readers you need to start out with an interesting passage.  Most editors and agents are going to ask for the first three chapters or X number of pages, but they want to see the beginning, so it should be your best stuff and include what is referred to as the hook.  The hook is just that thing that is interesting about your character or the story that will make someone want to read further. 

There have been attempts to study what makes people keep reading, of course it’s not universal, but if you have an interesting hook most readers will give you the benefit of the doubt and get through the first chapter.  If you hold them that long they will read more chapters until they are invested in the book and finish it.  Most readers are stubborn and once you hook them they won’t give up on a book unless you give them a reason to.

Prelude or not? Most writers I've talked to recommend skipping the prelude idea, just start your novel there if it's that interesting.  It is situation dependent. Again, this is not a hard and fast rule. 


The most important thing is to tell a good story.  It’s more important to tell a good story than to write well, but both are a plus, so learn your craft.

Show, don’t tell.  This means let the action play out; don’t just describe it in summary form.  Action sequences should always be shown.  There are parts of the story you can skim over with broad brush to avoid boring the reader, but too much of this makes the story feel empty.  Ideally you leave all the boring parts out.

Info dumps should be kept to a minimum or broken up into smaller bits and brought out in the right spots, preferably by one of your characters via conversation.

Know the rules of grammar.  You can say anything but punctuate it properly.  An excellent book for the essentials on clear, correct English is Strunk and White’s – Elements of Style
Another great resource is the podcast Grammar Girl.

Read your book out loud to make sure it flows.  Dialogue should be dynamic and not stilted, but written dialogue is not like real talking.  Leave out the “uhs,” the choppy unfinished sentences and stuttering unless you are trying to set a tone or particular character trait.

Minimize the use of strange language.  Too much technical jargon or unusual language is going to lose your reader, just pepper it in to give the feel and style you are trying to portray.  Ease the reader into it and you can use it a little more later on perhaps, once they get accustomed to what you’re doing.

Describe only what is needed.  My personal pet peeve is over-doing the description.  Most of us are not Nora Roberts.  Let’s not fool ourselves or overcompensate by describing every detail of something that really has no bearing on the story.  The idea here is to only describe things that might be different or things the character notices.  I know different people have different tastes on this and some well-known authors still do this, but if you are going to do it just know that I am probably skimming that part.

The Joy of discovery.  Sometimes your characters are going to take you places you hadn’t planned on.  This, to me, is one of the great joys of writing, but sometimes they will take you down a dead end or completely off course.  Then you will have to decide if the new direction is a better story or if it really is just going to derail the entire plot.  Save all this stuff though.  Don’t throw any good prose away.  I keep a boneyard for all my ideas that I can salvage things from later.

Use Active voice.   Passive voice is weak and tends to make you add a lot more words than you need.  It is appropriate at times to slow up the pace, but as a general rule active voice makes things happen in a style that creates action and movement, which will help hold the reader.  There is a place for passive voice and it will require some work to develop a feel for it.

Avoid editing and writing at the same time.  You write with the right side of your brain and edit with the left side.  Your creativity flows from the right side, so try to avoid mixing in left side stuff when you are in the creative mode.  You do use both sides at the same time or you wouldn’t be able to write, but if you avoid going back and changing a lot of stuff constantly while you are in creative mode you will likely have more success moving the story forward.

A good book on helping avoid passive voice and other editing tips is The 10% Solution by Ken Rand. 

I love using the thesaurus to avoid using the same word too often.

Where do you get your ideas?

People ask all the time where you get your ideas from, but honestly once you actually start this writing thing as a regular part of your life the ideas just flow. 

Keep a notebook with you as much as possible and write down ideas as they come to you. 

Reading a lot helps, with style and tempo and form.  Read as much as you can.  But I know a lot of authors avoid stuff that is too close to what they are presently working on to avoid too much influence on their story (and lawsuits).

Dreams are often a good source of ideas.

I read lots of magazine articles on the subjects I’m interested in writing about.  For me Scientific American is a great source of ideas.

The web is a great source for ideas as well.  I stay up on news events in my area of interest also.

I love listening to writing podcasts.  My favorite is Writing Excuses. These guys and gal are successful writers and have a plethora of good advice for aspiring writers.

I borrowed an idea from Brandon Sanderson for keeping track of story ideas.  I use a Book Guide.  It is broken down into four sections: Character, Setting, Plot and Boneyard just flesh out the information for each section as you develop more of the ideas.  I find this helps immensely with continuity and just tracking down mundane stuff that you’ve put in the setting or how you spelled someone’s name, or the color of their hair, etc.

Habit patterns

Write as often as you can.  It’s best if you can develop a habit of writing.  If you can manage to get a regular time and place to write that is ideal.  The whole trick is to write, as often as you can.  Then write some more.  Did I say that enough?

Here is an interesting fact: 250 words is approximately one page for determining your novel length.  It takes about 15 minutes to half an hour to do that each day.  If you do that for a year you will have a novel length book.  Obviously if you can write for an hour or two each day you can pump one out a lot faster.

You may find that the more you write the better it flows and the ideas just start coming out of the wood work.  The imagination is a muscle that needs to be exercised regularly.

Editing and Reviewing

Get a Writing Partner or two or three.  They write, and can be a free way to get good edits and ideas for where you went off course or just didn’t connect something properly.  Sometimes you have all that story in your head and you make assumptions that the reader knows things, when you haven’t actually made it clear.  A critique group is a great idea also. If you can’t find a local group, then look on the Internet.  There are lots of places to get free critiques.  One of the better ones I’ve used is Critters. Beta Readers can help with this also. 
Once you finish the manuscript hand it off to a first reader, one that is going to give you real feedback, not your mom, who loves you and won’t tell you the hard truth.  Listen to the critiques and make changes if you think their critique is valid. You don't have to take all, or any for that matter, but listen to what they are saying.

Don’t over edit.  Error checking is great and continuity checking is good, but your editor voice doesn’t have the same view of your work and if you do too much editing you may lose the magic that made your story work.  I read often that the first draft is often crap and you need to edit brilliantly, but the creative part of your story is going to come out on the first pass more than likely, so keep this in mind.  Three or four passes is probably enough to get the big stuff: errors, continuity and first reader/beta reader comments that show stuff that might require some tweaking is probably all you need.  Your mileage may vary here, but the idea is to let go at some point and start mailing out your story.

In the end you will want a professional editor and they do cost money.  If you can sell your book, then the publisher will provide this for you, but if you self-pub do everyone a favor and pay for one.

You’re done, now what?

If you are going to submit your writing to someone, whether agent or editor, follow the guidelines they lay down.    There are people that get picked up that don’t follow the rules but they are not norm.

Have faith in yourself and be prepared for rejection, it’s likely going to happen, a lot. 

Publishing cycle

Traditional publishing is going to take at least two years before you see your book in print.  It could be longer.  Many of them won’t want to publish more than one a year due to their seasonal release schedule and just not wanting to oversaturate, if that is even a real problem.  They also don’t give you a lot of information on sales, and payment can be delayed.  They will often give you money up front though, in the form of advances.  The value of the advance has been going down in recent years as the publishing industry has been in such turmoil, but from what I am reading lately things seem to be leveling off and traditional publishing is profitable again (for them). 

This is where self-publishing has a real advantage.  You can publish quickly, in a few days to get formatting right, and publish as frequently as you like.  I know several novelists that are publishing as many as four novels a year this way.  If you are a prolific writer and don’t want to wait on the traditional publishing cycle this is the way to go.
Agent or Not

There is a lot of discussion on this issue right now.  It will really depend on how much of the business side of things you want to take on.  If you don’t want to mess with any of it then an agent is probably the way to go.  If you can take the time to understand the business and work your own contracts then you probably don’t need an agent.  You can always use an independent editor and an attorney that specializes in book contracts to help you out here.  For more on this subject I would read through Dean Wesley Smith’s website on debunking the publishing industry myths:
Once you are ready to submit your novel get it in the mail and START ON THE NEXT BOOK.


If you don’t have any luck getting a big time publisher to buy your book or you simply just want to, you can self-publish and there are lots of ways these days to do this.  You will also keep a larger percentage of the book sale, and have a lot more velocity in the publishing cycle.  The down side is you have to pay for all marketing yourself and take care of all the business transactions, cover design, tracking for taxes, etc., yourself.

This tidbit is something I found in the comments section of one of Dean Wesley Smith’s blogs:

Put your novel up on Smashwords, which gets you to Sony, Nook, iBook, and other places. Cost: Free
Put your novel through CreateSpace in trade paperback form in POD. That gets it to Amazon. Cost: Free (or $39.00 if you want better distribution into all stores.)
Put your novel through LighteningSource in trade paperback form in POD. That gets it to Ingram. Cost: around $100.00

From what I gather that will pretty much get your books to every English speaking market on the globe.

Good luck on your writing!

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Let That Thing Fester

Thursday March 29, 2012 | By Hieronymus Hawkes | Uncategorized | Leave Comments

The title of this post is so awesome that I feel like the post itself isn't going to live up to it.  I actually thought of saving it for another post on the subject but I'm going to go with it anyway.  I'm having issues finding time for this currently, and I 'm not proud of it.  I know I’ve been absent lately but I have been doing the job of three people at my day job (literally) and cramming for my Air War College Exam.  The good news is we have enough people back at work that I can get back to just doing my own job and I got the results back from my exam, which I passed with an excellent!  I’m only one test away from finishing now, so I’m buckling down to get through it and then I can refocus on finishing the edits for Clear Ether and get it out to some beta readers. I actually had a little down time in there while I was waiting for the exam to be graded.  I was initially expecting four weeks of waiting but it only took four days.  At any rate, I had time to do some revision on the first few chapters after feedback from my alpha readers and I actually feel like I have enough distance now to see it like someone else wrote it.  I was able to make big cuts and move some stuff around and really focus the POV.  Getting that distance is key.  I got some great advice and some great feedback from my alphas, thank you! When people tell you to put your manuscript in the drawer for a month or two and let it ferment, they aren’t kidding.  I did some preliminary editing after only a few days, but I was really having trouble seeing the errors.  Stacy can tell you I went off the reservation with the word “just”.  It was laughable how many times I used that word in one chapter alone. As the creator you can often have a hard time detaching yourself from your own POV.  You already know everything that happened and all the background details and motivations, so when you go in to start your revisions you can't divorce yourself from yourself (Austin Powers anyone?) without giving yourself enough time after the manuscript is finished.  Completing the manuscript is a huge thing.  A lot of writers never get there, so I've heard.  And I know I was excited, not because I finished the manuscript, but because I was one step closer to being published, and I wanted to get on with the revisions.  I'm here to tell you that you have to wait a bit before you take that next step. The manuscript is near and dear to your heart.  You've invested a lot of energy and time getting to "The End".  Carving up your baby is simply not feasible at that point.  Any believe me, it needs to be carved up and have great chunks removed and tossed in the waste bin. (Boneyard)  It's like a grotesque turkey that has too many legs and wings and parts sticking out and it needs to be prepped and oiled and baked to perfection still.  But before you can do any of that you need to stick it somewhere dark, where you will leave it alone, and let it fester for a few months.  When you put it away it looked like a bright shiny baby, when it comes out it will look like Chucky, and you can stab it and carve it up.  I must be hungry.  Enough of the carving analogies.  You get the idea. When you get it back out you will be able to see it as a work of literary fiction instead of “your precious”.  You can see the POV errors and the extra background that really isn’t germane to the story.  You can see the bad dialogue tags and the dreaded adverbs and poor word choices.  You can see the poorly written sentences, and maybe there are chapters that really don’t even need to be there.  At the very least they need to be massively trimmed and combined with another part somewhere else.  It is eye opening … really.  Put that sucker away!  Don’t touch it!  Ah..I see you going back to look at it, I said leave it alone. Anyway, as an aside, I’m also in the process of applying for a Master’s program in writing, so I had to put some finishing touches on some writing and then write a Letter of Intent.  It was kinda fun actually. I’m shooting for the Seton Hill University Master of Fine Arts in Writing Popular Fiction degree.  It is a distance learning program that will only require me to spend 5 days each semester on campus.  That works great for my busy lifestyle.   The cool thing is it is designed for you to have a publishable novel length book at the end of the program.  I’m very excited about it and have my fingers crossed to get in.  It’s a small Catholic university near Pittsburg, so it’s also driving distance, at least until I move. I hope you are all having great fortune in your writing and reading! Clear Ether!

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Inspirations to Get in Your Character’s Head

Saturday August 6, 2011 | By Hieronymus Hawkes | Uncategorized | Leave Comments

In case you missed it, I finished the 1st draft of the WIP.  You get to go on this journey with me as I move to this next phase, the rewriting phase.      I have two main POV characters, and they are as different as night and day.  For the first pass I've decided that I am going to go back through and stay with one character's story line to the end of the book just to stay in their head and get their voice right and try to tighten up their perspective.  I have a little helper to get me in the right mindset -- it's called music.  =) Do you like to listen to music when you write?  I do, and I find that different types of music put me in a different mindset while I write.  For Laurent, who is a Nemesi, or what you would call a vampire, I like something edgier, a little darker.  I have a playlist for this type of music which includes Breaking Benjamin, Three Days Grace, and Red.  For Anneliese, my female bad-ass pilot, I like something a little different and have a set with TRON:Legacy Soundtrack, Muse, The Black Keys, Radiohead and 30 Seconds to Mars.  They can help with emotions and feel, they actually have empathy for my character. How about you?  Do you have a thing that helps you get into your characters head?  I'd love to hear about it! Clear Ether!

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More Cowbell!

Saturday June 25, 2011 | By Hieronymus Hawkes | Uncategorized | Leave Comments

morecowbell.jpgIf you haven’t seen the classic skit on Saturday Night live, here is a link.  I think it’s apropos to what I want to talk about this week.  It’s all about adding the right components to your story as you go along.  Maybe not quite that much cowbell, but definitely more.   It may not be quite as important on the first draft, but it really needs to be paid attention to in the rewrite phases.   If you’re an aspiring writer you really should be listening to Writing Excuses.  They have a real knack for presenting material in a way that is easy to understand and provides some great instruction.   They just added the wonderful Mary Robinette Kowal to their permanent team and this week’s episode was about Internal Motivations.  She is a great add and she has a fascinating take on how to write and is very good at clearly describing how she thinks about it. This week’s episode spurred a conversation with my wife about maintaining the right perspective through your POV character and how when it is well done really makes a huge difference in the showing instead of telling.  I think we all know when we read something and it is compelling.  It just feels right and evokes emotions or understanding on our part.  However, I’m not convinced that we all know why we feel that way.  If a character has been giving hints as to how they think with little snippets of how they see the world peppered in along the story if makes their observations intuitive later in the book.  It cuts down on the need to tell about something when you are already in that narrator’s head.  My wife made the comment, “isn’t that just common sense?”  You would think it would be, but I think a lot of new writers don’t quite get it.  It makes a lot of sense on hindsight, when it’s pointed out to you how the author built their character’s POV along the way, but seeing something that “feels” right and really understanding how the author got you there is not so intuitive.   We know as writer’s what we should be doing, but so many new writers still end up telling instead of showing because they miss adding the little touches along the way and then want to convey something, but end up having to add an info dump or take the reader out of the story to add a narrative to add in extra stuff to make their point.  This becomes the classic telling instead of showing. It’s the smooth touches along the way that add the magic.  The reader hardly notices that the writer is adjusting their point of view with subtle hints and observances.  In the last book I read, the main character was always noticing what things were made of or who designed it because she was very much about design.  It was one of her characteristics that she was good at noticing trends in the subculture and Gibson didn’t just tell us that, he showed it in every detail along the entire story.  She noticed architecture and materials and when things were old or new.  But it wasn’t in your face; it was just her noticing it, with very little actual text -- just little bits and pieces here and there. As you’re going through your rewrite really focus on staying in the POV of the narrator and show the reader what they see, just a little bit here and there, it will save on the telling later on and will make your character come to life.  We can all use a little more cowbell in our writing.   Clear Ether!  

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Finding Your Voice

Tuesday May 31, 2011 | By Hieronymus Hawkes | Uncategorized | Leave Comments

voices.jpgPoint of view is a basic building block of writing a story.  It’s the vantage point from which a story is told.  When done well, it can really make your story pop.  First person is obvious; you are in the head of the main character and stay there.  2nd person is a little strange, and rarely used in story form, but puts the reader into the story, referring to “you” instead of the “I” of 1st person.   3rd person is the most commonly used form for narratives and has many forms, from Omniscient, where you see into everyone’s head, to Objective, where you see into nobody’s head, to Subjective, where you have the point of view of a particular character.  Subjective seems to be coming into vogue, and to me, it gives you, the writer, a lot more options to do interesting things.   Limited 3rd person POV falls in this category and I’m using it for my current WIP.  I started with the story in 1st person, but I decided to bring in a second main character, so I needed to change up how I was writing it. Limited 3rd person POV gives you the flexibility to change points of view and stay in the head of the narrator for that section.   It is very similar to first person, but allows you to tell the story from more than one character, and if there are parts of the story that your main character won’t see but you want to share this can really add a lot to your narrative.  Or maybe you just want to bring in a different view point to see something from a different angle. Another subcategory is the unreliable narrator, which adds another flavor to the story.  This from The opposite of a reliable narrator, an unreliable narrator typically displays characteristics or tendencies that indicate a lack of credibility or understanding of the story. Whether due to age, mental disability or personal involvement, an unreliable narrator provides the reader with either incomplete or inaccurate information as a result of these conditions. Done well it will really draw in and perhaps down a path that may be misleading, as you can’t be sure what you are experiencing is reality or just how the character perceives it. I do have a pet peeve though and nothing bothers me more as a reader than when the author jumps from one person to another in successive paragraphs without so much as a breath, especially if they are very similar in perspective and style.  I really dislike it, so I’m switching chapters for each change, at least until my main characters come together in the story.  I may switch those to chapter changes as well after I finished reading a book by one of my favorite writers. I just finished William Gibson’s latest novel, zero history, and it’s a work of literary art in my opinion.   His best work I think and I’ve read all of his novels.   It is a study in character development and the use of limited 3rd person POV and a well done unreliable narrator in the character of Milgrim, a recovering addict.  There is one particular scene that really stood out as a great example of how to differentiate your voice when looking through the eyes of a different character.  In this setting each character climbs a stairway in the Salon du Vintage in Paris separately.

Hollis Henry -- She went with them, up a minimalist stairway of pale Scandinavian wood,… Milgrim -- …he climbed a handsomely renovated stairway to the second floor.
  In these short sentence fragments you can see how the world looks differently and how Gibson shows it.  She notices the type of wood used and the architectural design.  Milgrim just sees a newly renovated stairwell that he is favorably impressed with and little other detail, because he just doesn’t know architecture or materials.  It’s a very small piece in a novel filled with details like this.  But this is the stuff that sets the really great writers apart from the average. Every character should have a distinct voice that the reader should be able to pick up without you having to put up a neon sign.  It can be tricky.  You don’t want to start overdoing the speech idiosyncrasies; a little goes a long way.  Men and women are different, but not so different that you turn them into caricatures.  They should see the world differently, as they bring their prejudices and expertise, or lack thereof, to their viewpoint, but it’s little things.  As the example shows, in the long view, many little things add up to a nice tally at the bottom of the balance sheet. Good luck in your writing!   Clear Ether!

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Valentine’s Day Tribute – How I turned my Military SF into a PR Space Opera

Thursday February 10, 2011 | By Hieronymus Hawkes | Uncategorized | Leave Comments

When I started planning the current WIP, I didn't have any romance in mind at all. It was going to be straight up Military SF. I don't think I even had any major female characters. As the ideas percolated I changed the sex of one of my major characters to a female, and then hit on the idea for my MC as a vampire and the entire scope of the book changed completely as did the POV. I had in mind to do a first person story from the vampires POV. A lot of time passed in the real world while all these gyrations were going on and in the midst of it my wife started reading again. When I say she started reading again I mean she started reading voraciously. It all happened more or less simultaneously with me trying to develop my story arc. She started really getting into the paranormal romance books. Twilight started it all. It was like an entry level drug, which leads to stronger stuff. Then she got me to read some of the stuff she was reading and I found that I actually enjoyed a lot of it. I'm particularly fond of Patty Briggs' Mercy Thompson books, and Kelley Armstrong's Otherworld series, and I even read most of the Archeron books by Sherrilyn Kenyon. At some point in there I realized that if I could develop a story arc with some romance in it the appeal would widen and it would also allow me to bring in an entirely new POV that would let me explore more of the universe I was creating. That was when the current outline materialized. I have two main characters, one male and one female. I had the idea of a Y shaped story arc, chasing both POVs until they intermingle to form a single plot line, allowing me to bring in some romantic elements and defining the course of my sequels. I had never written a female perspective before so it was challenging to make her feminine but not a caricature. I really started studying the personalities of some of the woman I work with. I work with female pilots and my female lead is a pilot. What I discovered over the course of the last couple of years is that men and women can have similar personalities and similar interests. I can find a woman that if I just described her likes and dislikes you might think it was a guy. I have also met men that were the opposite. This was a bit of a relief, but on the other hand I have to keep the reader in mind and what their expectation might be. It's not completely defining, if I write her well enough I should be able to sell her regardless of the things she's interested in, but it freed me to take her some places I might not have otherwise. Doing the romance part and not rushing it is not as easy as you might think. I think most of us can remember those first moments when we knew we liked someone or the big moments like when we got engaged or married, but how well do you remember all the intervening steps. It's like a dance and you need to draw it out and make it last a bit, tantalizing the reader and delaying the gratification as much as you dare. I'm still in the middle of that part and I'm working hard to get it right. The nice part is I think about my wife a lot, since I know I did some things right in our courtship. Think about your significant other this week and try to do something special to remind them how much they mean to you. I hope you all have a great Valentine's Day!   Clear Ether!

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